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The two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps illustrate the development of the road line to a city hospital from the years 2007 to 2010. Overall, the road access to the city was completely transformed with the addition of the figure of road, the size of the bus station and the number of car park providing for people and hospital staff. In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by square Ring Road. Next to this road, there was Hospital Road, which was merely the main road connected to Ring Road in the south. Furthermore, the two sides of this road were included with small six bus stop and only one parking lot for workers and the general public in the east of the main road. By 2010, the three-way junction and the intersection on the two sides of the Hospital Road, in the north and south respectively, was noticeably developed to the roundabout. And many of bus stops, in 2007, was changed to the large bus station in the west of Hospital Road. In addition, the car park had been changed into an only staff in the same space and there was a new space for the public in the eastern city hospital.
The two maps illustrate the development of the
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line to a city
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hospital
from the years 2007 to 2010.
Overall
, the
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road
access to the city was completely transformed with the addition of the figure of
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road
, the size of the bus station and the number of car park providing for
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people
and
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hospital
staff. In 2007, the city
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hospital
was surrounded
by square Ring
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Road
.
Next
to this
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road
, there was
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Hospital
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Road
, which was
merely
the main
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road
connected to Ring
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Road
in the south.
Furthermore
, the two sides of this
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road
were included
with
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small
six bus
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stop
and
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only
one parking lot for workers and the
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general public
in the east of the main
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road
. By 2010, the three-way junction and the intersection on the two sides of the
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Hospital
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Road
, in the north and south
respectively
, was
noticeably
developed to the roundabout. And
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many
of bus
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stops
, in 2007, was
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changed
to the large bus station in the west of
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Hospital
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Road
.
In addition
, the car park had been
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changed
into an
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only
staff in the same space and there was a new space for the public in the eastern city
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hospital
.
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IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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