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How the West Park Secondary School changed from 1950 to 2010.

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The pictures demonstrate how the West Park Secondary School changed from 1950 to 2010. Overall, School has changed a lots such as the car park, sport field, playground, and science block, Whereas the main road and the School have been stable. In 1950, it was clearly seen that there were separated into 4 parts unequally, Houses, School, Farmland, and Playground. Moreover, beside houses and school were the main road. In the next 30 years, the main road and the playground still the same, while the houses were modified to be a car park and a science block. Although, the school was constant, they were changing the duty to be the main building, also the Farmland was developed to a sport fields. In 2010, their were changed only the car park, sports field, and playground. The car park became larger and reduced the areas of the sport fields and playground.
The pictures demonstrate how the West
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changed
from 1950 to 2010.

Overall
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,
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field
,
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playground
, and science block, Whereas the
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main
road and the
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School
have been stable.

In 1950, it was
clearly
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that there
were separated
into 4 parts
unequally
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Houses
,
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School
, Farmland, and
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.
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houses
and
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school
were the
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road. In the
next
30 years, the
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main
road and the
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still
the same, while the
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houses
were modified
to be a
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car
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park
and a science block. Although, the
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school
was constant, they were changing the duty to be the
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main
building,
also
the Farmland
was developed
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sport
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fields
. In 2010, their were
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. The
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became larger and
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IELTS academic How the West Park Secondary School changed from 1950 to 2010.

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