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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. r8K1o
The diagram explains how fish pies are commercially produced. Overall, the ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas, sauce and potatoes. The fish and potatoes are prepared separately with different stages. For the preparation of potatoes, potatoes are delivered up to one month in advance, are cleaned and peeled and cut into slices. After this, slices of potatoes are boiled, chilled and stored in a container. On the other hand, the fresh salmon is delivered within 12 hours. The lemon juice and salt are added to the fish and the mixed recipe is steamed in oven. The skin and bones are then removed, followed by visual inspection and is added by prepared peas and sauce. In the next stage, the prepared potato slices are added to the fish and then wrapped. The finished fish cakes are dispatched to the destinations or stored until being dispatched.
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explains
how fish pies are
commercially
produced.

Overall
, the ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas, sauce and
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potatoes
. The fish and
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potatoes
are prepared
separately
with
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different
stages.

For the preparation of
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potatoes
,
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potatoes
are delivered
up to one month in advance,
are cleaned
and peeled and
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cut
into slices. After this, slices of
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potatoes
are boiled
, chilled and stored in a container.
On the other hand
, the fresh salmon
is delivered
within 12 hours. The lemon juice and salt are
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added
to the fish and the mixed recipe
is steamed
in oven. The skin and bones are then removed, followed by visual inspection and is
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added
by prepared peas and sauce. In the
next
stage, the prepared
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potato
slices are
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added
to the fish and then wrapped. The finished fish cakes
are dispatched
to the destinations or stored until
being dispatched
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
144 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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