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The diagram shows us the short procedure applied by an enterprise.

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The diagram shows us the short procedure applied by an enterprise. As we can see the process starts with receiving the order, after that the order goes on the stage of order from current, if it is right the operation carry on with the quality, then if the order has a good quality, a discount is applied, and the process continues. We can notice in the first step when the order from the current is wrong the course change and de order is referred by the current, after that the company referring client offering a discount on the order. So, moving on to the next step when the referred by current, the following step is to add a new client to the customer database and we continue with the final line of the procedure with putting the order into the system and finally, the operation ends with sending the order and charging the client.
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us the short procedure applied by an enterprise. As we can
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the process
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starts
with receiving the
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order
, after that the
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order
goes on the stage of
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order
from
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current
, if it is right the operation carry on with the quality, then if the
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order
has a
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good
quality, a discount
is applied
, and the process continues. We can notice in the
first
step when the
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order
from the
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current
is
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wrong
the course
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change
and
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order
is referred
by the
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current
, after that the
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company
referring client offering a discount on the order.

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, moving on to the
next
step when the referred by
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current
, the following step is to
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add
a new client to the customer
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database and
we continue with the final line of the procedure with putting the
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order
into the system and
finally
, the operation ends with sending the
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order
and charging the client.
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