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The diagram shows two ways of using the energy from ocean waves to generate electricity.

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The diagram gives a illustration about two different ways to extract energy from ocean waves to collect electricity. The first method uses a pump system to generate electricity. The second one makes electricity with the help of an airflow that is caused by waves. The first method makes use of the swell. The swell causes that a floating device goes up and down. This is connected to the piston, that pump the water out of the ocean up to a storage tank, via a intake pipe. This pipe has a valve system, so that the water can only go in one direction. From the storage tank the water drops down back in the ocean, with the help of gravity and during the dropdown it windup a turbine. This turbine is connected to the generator, that makes electricity. With the second method the turbine is turned on by an airflow. This is done with the help of te waves, that pump air in and out of a cabin. This creates an airflow in the next room that turns on the turbine an with that the genrator to make electricity. Overall, both methods use a turbine that is connected to a generator to make electricity. However by the first method the turbine is turned on by a water flow and the second method by airflow.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows two ways of using the energy from ocean waves to generate electricity.

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