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the diagram shows the process of producing tea for selling in a supermarket.

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The presented diagram demonstrates the way in which tea is produced for selling in a supermarket. Overall, the process consist of seven main stages, beginning with picking tea by hand and ending up with delivery the product to the supermarket. Look at the diagram in more detail, tea seeds are grown over the period of three years. Then, the tea is picked by hand, before being left to rest indoor or outdoor. After that, the tea is put into the drying machine and dried under 260C for two hour. At the next stage, the dried tea is packaged to tea bags and put in boxes. Subsequently, the lorry delivers the boxes contain tea bags to the super market. Finally, the products are displayed on the shelves and purchased by the clients.
The presented diagram demonstrates the way in which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tea
is produced
for selling in a supermarket.
Overall
, the process consist of seven main stages, beginning with picking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tea
by hand and ending up with delivery the product to the supermarket. Look at the diagram in more detail,
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tea
seeds
are grown
over the period of three years. Then, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tea
is picked
by hand,
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before
being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
to rest indoor or outdoor. After that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tea
is put
into the drying machine and dried under 260C for two
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hour
. At the
next
stage, the dried
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tea
is packaged
to
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tea
bags and put in boxes.
Subsequently
, the lorry delivers the boxes contain
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tea
bags to the super market.
Finally
, the products
are displayed
on the shelves and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
by the clients.
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IELTS academic the diagram shows the process of producing tea for selling in a supermarket.

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