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The two given maps illustrate the augmetation of the university campus from 2010 to now

The two given maps illustrate the augmetation of the university campus from 2010 to now KlOWw
The two given maps illustrate the augmetation of the university campus from 2010 to now. The maps show that the campus has been upgraded and expanded, with significantly more student housing and services than before. In 2010, the number of student accommodation buildings has been increased in number and size. A previous student housing block south of the lake has been demolished and replaced by a new student building with stores and offices. In addition, the teaching facilities have been widened. The previous teaching block which were for arts and science has been changed into arts builing and there is a new building for the sciences to the north of the campus. The previous university offices have been replaced by this one. The lawn and outdoor dining area adjacent to the lake have been demolished. The lake, on the other hand, has remained and continued to be the focal point of the campus
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augmetation
of the university
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campus
from 2010 to
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now
. The maps
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show
that the
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campus
has
been upgraded
and expanded, with
significantly
more
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student
housing and services than
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before
.

In 2010, the number of
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student
accommodation buildings has
been increased
in number and size. A previous
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student
housing block south of the lake has
been demolished
and replaced by a new
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student
building with stores and offices.
In addition
, the teaching facilities have
been widened
. The previous teaching block which were for arts and science has been
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changed
into arts
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builing
and there is a new building for the sciences to the north of the
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campus
. The previous university offices have
been replaced
by this one.
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The
lawn and outdoor dining area adjacent to the lake have
been demolished
.
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The
lake,
on the other hand
, has remained and continued to be the focal point of the
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campus

IELTS academic The two given maps illustrate the augmetation of the university campus from 2010 to now

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