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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Ad7X
The maps illustrate the developments that have undertaken at west park secondary school over a period of six decades. Overall, it is clear that a comparison between three maps reveal a small transformation from the rural area to a largely recreational area. To the southwest of main road, there was a three residential houses which was demolished, and then, replaced with car parking area as well as science block in the year 1980. Moreover, farmland was knocked down to make way for sports field at the same interval of time. School was named as main building in the west of houses. By the year 1980, while car park was being extended adjacent to science centre, sports field was transformed to the south of school with smaller occupied space. However, from the beginning of the year 1950, playground had remained still.
The maps illustrate the developments that have undertaken at west park secondary school over a period of six decades.

Overall
, it is
clear
that a comparison between three maps reveal a
small
transformation from the rural area to a
largely
recreational area.

To the southwest of main road, there was a three residential
houses
which
was demolished
, and then, replaced with car parking area
as well
as science block in the year 1980.
Moreover
, farmland
was knocked
down to
make
way for sports field at the same interval of time. School
was named
as main building in the west of
houses
.

By the year 1980, while car park was
being extended
adjacent to science
centre
, sports field
was transformed
to the south of school with smaller occupied space.
However
, from the beginning of the year 1950, playground had remained
still
.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950.

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