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The bar chart shows the number of vistors to three loactions at london between 2007and 2012.

The bar chart shows the number of vistors to three loactions at london between 2007and 2012. oXNK
The given bar grapg illustrates data regarding the number of tourists who visit in three museum at london form 2007to 2012. To sum up, it is evidents that the most of the vistors went in National park as campared to other museum. But, the data had increased over the time of period. Whereas, the least tourism came in Victoris and albert museum and Bristish museum between 2007 and 2012. More specifically, in 2007 and 2008, 14 million of tourists visited in victoria and albert museum, although in 2007, above 10 million of visitors reached in british museum and the minimum travellers arrived in national park in both years. Next, the figure of three musuem showed fluctuations thorughout the period of time. Moving further, the maximum tourists were reached in National park stood at 10 million in 2010 and 2011, however 12 million of visitors came in British museum in 2011 and the least voyages came in same museum in 2010. Furthermore, the highest number of visitors went in victoria and albert museum and british museum at above 15 million and 4 million respectively.
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illustrates data regarding the number of tourists who visit in three
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Bristish
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between 2007 and 2012.

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, in 2007 and 2008, 14
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of tourists visited in
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in 2010 and 2011,
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in 2011 and the least voyages came in same
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albert
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the number of vistors to three loactions at london between 2007and 2012.

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