Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the aame park today summarise the information by selecting main features

the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the aame park today apNm
The above map shows a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. To start with, Its original structure in year 1920. Grank park mainly builded in rectangular shape. At the exact centre position, there was a fountain and slightly left side occupied by state for muscicians. There were two main entrances by which people could easily access to park. The eldon street entrance was situated at south while, Arnold avenue was located at north direction of the park with rose garden on right hand side area. Furthermore, pond for water plants was there next to rose garden. Besides that, seating facilities were available for people to seat and enjoy the entire view. Glasshouse was builded right next to eldon streen entrnace. Apart from these, few rose garden and seats were occupied at certain locations. The grank park has changed since then. Today for eccess the entry into park, both entrances are still remain at same area. However, at right side of eldon street entrance greenhouse is replaced by water feature. Rose garden is at central position where fountain was stood before. Whereas stage for musicians has been replaced by amphitheater for concerts along with its seats. On the other side, Cafe is opened on the right hand side of arnold evenue entrance. Nevertheless, Children’s play area seems to occupied instead of pond of water for plants.
The above map
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
a public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
when it
first
opened in 1920 and the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, Its original structure in year 1920.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Grank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
mainly
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "built", the past tense form of the verb 'build'?
builded
in rectangular shape. At the exact
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
position, there was a fountain and
slightly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side occupied by state for
Possible spelling mistake found.
muscicians
. There were two main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entrances
by which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could
easily
access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
. The
Possible spelling mistake found.
eldon
street
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entrance
was situated
at south while, Arnold avenue
was located
at north direction of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
right
hand side area.
Furthermore
, pond for water plants was there
next
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
.
Besides
that, seating facilities were available for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to seat and enjoy the entire view. Glasshouse was
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "built", the past tense form of the verb 'build'?
builded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
right
next
to
Possible spelling mistake found.
eldon
Possible spelling mistake found.
streen
Possible spelling mistake found.
entrnace
. Apart from these, few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
and seats
were occupied
at certain locations. The
Possible spelling mistake found.
grank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
since then.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
for
Possible spelling mistake found.
eccess
the entry into
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
, both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entrances
are
still
Consider using a past participle here: "remained".
remain
at same area.
However
, at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
right
side of
Possible spelling mistake found.
eldon
street
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entrance
greenhouse
is replaced
by water feature.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Rose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
garden
is at central position where fountain
was stood
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
. Whereas stage for musicians has
been replaced
by amphitheater for concerts along with its seats. On the other side,
'Cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
Cafe
is opened
on the
Did you mean the adjective "right-hand"?
right hand
side of
Possible spelling mistake found.
arnold
Possible spelling mistake found.
evenue
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entrance
.
Nevertheless
, Children’s play area seems to occupied
instead
of pond of water for plants.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the aame park today

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
232 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the aame park today summarise the information by selecting main features