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The diagram shows manufacturing of instant noodles

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The picture details the production of instant noodles. Overall, it is clearly observed that the process involves several steps from storage of raw materials following cooking to the last step labelling and sealing of instant noodles. Firstly, the instant noodles start with storage siols where flour is kept. After this, it is transported with oil and water to a mixer with the help of another source. Later on a thick dough is formed which is converted into to dough sheets with rollers. This sheets are cut into strips with factory machinery which then formed into a compact discs. Then noodles are cooked in oil and dry immediately. Further moving, the material is inserted in the different cups with vegetables and spices for taste. Finally, the cups are ready to pack and seal. This is the very last step where packaging and labelling and also sealing is done so that the end product is ready for retail.
The picture
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details
the production of instant noodles.

Overall
, it is
clearly
observed that the process involves several steps from storage of raw materials following cooking to the last step labelling and sealing of instant noodles.

Firstly
, the instant noodles
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start
with storage
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siols
where flour is
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kept
. After this, it
is transported
with oil and water to a mixer with the
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help
of another source. Later on a thick dough
is formed
which
is converted
into to dough sheets with rollers.
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This
sheets are
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cut
into strips with factory machinery which then formed into a compact
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "disc"?
discs
. Then noodles
are cooked
in oil and dry immediately.

Further
moving, the material
is inserted
in the
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different
cups with vegetables and spices for taste.
Finally
, the cups are ready to pack and seal. This is the
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very
last step where packaging and labelling and
also
sealing
is done
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so
that the
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end
product is ready for retail.
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