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The diagram shows how rain water is treated in Australian for domestic purposes.

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The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for drinking purposes in two different years. (1998 and 2001)Overall, the process of making drinking water has six steps beginning with the collection of rain water and ending up with the supply of drinking water. First of all, the process of making fresh drinking water begins with the collection of rain water from the roof of the house. And then, it is drained and the collected water is allowed to filter. Furthermore, the filtered water is stored in a tank. The next process takes place in the water tank which is connected with the storage tank. Here, the water is treated with the help of some chemicals which is at the top of the container. In addition, the chemically treated water is now ready for use and further transfered to houses for domestic purposes.
The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater for
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drinking
purposes in two
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different
years. (1998 and 2001)
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, the process of making
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drinking
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water
has six steps beginning with the collection of rain
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water
and ending up with the supply of
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drinking
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water
.
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First of all
, the process of making fresh
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drinking
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water
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begins
with the collection of rain
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water
from the roof of the
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house
. And then, it
is drained
and the collected
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water
is
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allowed
to filter.
Furthermore
, the filtered
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water
is stored
in a tank. The
next
process takes place in the
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water
tank which
is connected
with the storage tank. Here, the
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water
is treated
with the
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help
of
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some
chemicals which is at the top of the container.
In addition
, the
chemically
treated
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water
is
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now
ready for
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use
and
further
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transfered
to
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houses
for domestic purposes.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how rain water is treated in Australian for domestic purposes.

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143 words
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