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The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details.

The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details. aVWk9
The diagram outlines the principal stages involved in hydro-electric power generation. This process has its origins in the natural water cycle and concludes with power being provided to relevant infrastructure. At first,  solar energy heats water in the ocean, causing it to evaporate. As the water vapour rises, it condenses and forms into clouds which move over the land. Eventually, the clouds will drop rain, some of which will fall into a reservoir. The water stored in this area is kept back by a dam, which contains a valve to open and close it. When the valve is released, water flows down a steep incline and its momentum spins a turbine, producing power. At this point, most of the power is transferred through high-voltage lines to  a transformer station, which converts the power into a voltage that is suitable for the electricity needs of the local area. Finally, it is important to state that some of the surplus power generated by the turbine is used to pump the water back up into the reservoir so that it can be used to meet electricity demands in the future. (186 words)
The diagram outlines the principal stages involved in hydro-electric
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power
generation. This process has its origins in the natural
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water
cycle and concludes with
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power
being provided
to relevant infrastructure.

At
first
,
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solar energy heats
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water
in the ocean, causing it to evaporate. As the water 
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vapour
 rises, it condenses and forms into clouds which
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move
over the land.
Eventually
, the clouds will drop rain,
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some
of which will fall into a reservoir. The
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water
stored in this area is
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kept
back by a dam, which contains a valve to open and close it. When the valve
is released
,
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water
flows down a steep incline and its momentum spins a turbine, producing
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power
. At this point, most of the
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power
is transferred
through high-voltage lines to
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a transformer station, which converts the
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power
into a voltage
that is
suitable for the electricity needs of the local area.

Finally
, it is
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important
to state that
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some of the
 surplus power generated by the turbine is
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used
to pump the
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water
back up into the reservoir
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so
that it can be
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used
to
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meet
electricity demands in the future. (186 words)
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how hydro-electric power is generated. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main details.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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