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The diagram show the process in which tourist can develop and grow

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The rendered process chart depicts the information about the new build resort for tourists. In this process 9 steps are important to complete this process. To commence with, firstly a new hotel set up in the area. Secondly, It is created a lot of job opportunities in the hotel directly. In the th third stage, new hotel provide local business supply service to customers. To follow this step, other companies are attached to the area. More over, this hotel provide many indirectly job opportunities to people. Moving further, workers spend their money in the local area tax for the increase revenues. The last third step describe this area is popular among the tourist destination and it increases profitablility and revenue for re -investment. More over, taxs spend to improve the infrastructure and tourists services. Lastly, some amount of money lost through leakage. Overall, all steps are important to complete this process.
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chart depicts the information about the new build resort for tourists. In this
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9
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to complete this
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set up in the
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job opportunities in the
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directly
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third stage, new
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provide local business supply service to customers. To follow this
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, other
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companies
are attached
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provide
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job opportunities to
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people
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tax for the increase revenues. The last third
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is popular among the tourist destination and it increases
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profitablility
and revenue for re -investment. More over,
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spend to
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improve
the infrastructure and tourists services.
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amount of money lost through leakage.
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IELTS academic The diagram show the process in which tourist can develop and grow

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