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THE DIAGRAM SHOWS THE LIFE CYCLE ON THE HONEYBEE

THE DIAGRAM SHOWS THE LIFE CYCLE ON THE HONEYBEE KVnG3

The process of lifecycle of the honey bee is provided by the diagram. Overall its seems that it would take more than a month from journey of laying eggs to getting mature. Furthermore, it would take less than two week to hatch eggs. As is shown first eggs were laid by the female every three days. Quantity of laid eggs is one or two for every three days. Then, those eggs get hatched after 9-10 days. Next, after five days of it hatched egg becomes a baby bee. Then, after more couple of days size get increased. Next, female moults get 3times bigger after growth of 9days from hatched day. According to the chart after 9days of growth, young adults start emerging. Consequently, size of bees also get bigger with time. Then, after emerging it will take 4days to get maturity in bees. Next, matured female continue to lay eggs at frequency of three days and same cycle keep repeating it self.

The process of lifecycle of the honey bee is provided
 by the diagram.

Overall
 its seems that it would take more than a month from journey of laying eggs to getting mature. Furthermore
, it would take less than two Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: "weeks".weeks
week
 to hatch eggs.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
is shown
first
 eggs were laid
 by the female every three days. Quantity of laid eggs is one or two for every three days. Then, those eggs This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 hatched after 9-10 days. Next
, after five days of it hatched egg becomes a baby bee. Then, after more couple of days size This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 increased. Next
, female Possible spelling mistake found.mountsmolts
moults
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 3times bigger after growth of 9days from hatched day.

According to the chart after 9days of growth, young adults This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 emerging. Consequently
, size of bees also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 bigger with time. Then, after emerging it will take 4days to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 maturity in bees. Next
, matured female continue to lay eggs at frequency of three days and same cycle This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 repeating Did you mean "itself"?itself
it self
. 