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The diagram provides information about the main process of instant noodles in industries.

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The diagram provides information about the main process of instant noodles in industries. Overall, the procedure consists of eight stages; on top of that, beginning with storage silos and ending up with labelling and sealing. First of all, flour is collected in storage silos, it is then sent to a mixer where water and oil are added to the flour. Following this, the mixture undergoes rollers and a machine called dough sheet. The next step is to go through dough strips where it is cut into many pieces. Subsequently, noodles experience a process called noodles discs which makes them become round shape, after that, they are cooked with oil; in addition, drying is the next stage. Before the final step, noodles are put into a cup with vegetables and spices. Finally, the cups need to be labelled and sealed and ready to be sold.
The diagram provides information about the main process of instant
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noodles
in industries.

Overall
, the procedure consists of eight stages;
on top of that
, beginning with storage silos and ending up with labelling and sealing.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, flour
is collected
in storage silos, it is then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to a mixer where water and oil are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the flour. Following this, the mixture undergoes rollers and a machine called dough sheet. The
next
step is to go through dough strips where it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
into
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
pieces.

Subsequently
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodles
experience a process called
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodles
discs which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them become round shape, after that, they
are cooked
with oil;
in addition
, drying is the
next
stage.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Before
the final step,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodles
are put
into a cup with vegetables and spices.
Finally
, the cups need to
be labelled
and sealed and ready to
be sold
.
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