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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. 0AWJ5
The given diagram describes how the bricks are made for the building industry. Overall there are seven processes in the production of bricks starting with the digging of clay and ending with the delivery of bricks. First of all, the clay needed to make bricks is dug from the earth with the help of a digger. Then, the dug clay is spread on the metal grid and placed above the roller. Next, sand and water is added to the clay and this mixture is either poured into the mould or undergoes wire cutting to make bricks. Following this, the bricks are placed for drying in the oven for 1-2 days. Subsequently, they are first heated in a kiln at a moderate temperature of 200 degree – 980 degree C and then at a high temperature of 870 – 1300 degree C respectively. The bricks are then cooled for 48-72 hours. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destination by trucks.
The
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given
diagram
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describes
how the
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bricks
are made
for the building industry.
Overall
there are seven processes in the production of
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bricks
starting with the digging of
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clay
and ending with the delivery of bricks.

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First of all
, the
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clay
needed to
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make
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bricks
is dug
from the earth with the
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help
of a digger. Then, the dug
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clay
is spread
on the metal grid and placed above the roller.
Next
, sand and water is
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added
to the
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clay
and this mixture is either poured into the
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mould
or undergoes wire cutting to
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make
bricks.

Following this, the
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bricks
are placed
for drying in the oven for 1-2 days.
Subsequently
, they are
first
heated in a kiln at a moderate temperature of 200 degree
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–
980 degree C and then at a high temperature of 870 – 1300 degree C
respectively
. The
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bricks
are then cooled for 48-72 hours.
Finally
, the
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bricks
are packed
and delivered to their destination by trucks.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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