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The diagram illustrates the process of an automated teller machine transaction in the world

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The diagram illustrates the process of an automated teller machine transaction in the world in six steps, with three main features relevant: the local bank, the customer’s home bank, and the network. In the first step, the customer put the card and entered the personal identification number at the local bank. Then, an automatic message is sent to the network, which Settlement provided between the local bank and the customer’s home bank. Next, the local bank sent a message to the network Instantaneously, the customer's home bank has received that message from the network, in which the funds are available and the money debited from the customer’s account. The bank directs to the network with the content “Ok” and it continuously transfers forward to the local bank. The customer can be immediately permitted to execute the transaction. The diagram describes the accessibility of ATMs for users and also helps them understand that the bank only provides money if their bank account has sufficient funds.
The diagram illustrates the process of an automated teller machine transaction in the world in six steps, with three main features relevant: the
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local
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bank
, the
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customer’s
home
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bank
, and the network.

In the
first
step, the
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customer
put the card and entered the personal identification number at the
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local
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bank
. Then, an automatic message is
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sent
to the network, which Settlement provided between the
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local
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bank
and the
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customer’s
home
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bank
.
Next
, the
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local
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bank
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sent
a message to the network

Instantaneously
, the customer's home
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bank
has received that message from the network, in which the funds are available and the money debited from the
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customer’s
account. The
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bank
directs to the network with the content “Ok” and it
continuously
transfers forward to the
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local
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bank
. The
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customer
can be immediately permitted to execute the transaction.

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The
diagram
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describes
the accessibility of ATMs for users and
also
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helps
them understand that the
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bank
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only
provides money if their
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bank
account has sufficient funds.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process of an automated teller machine transaction in the world

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6.5
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