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The given image demonstrates the typical amount of British workers who are moving by different types of transport over the period from 1970 to 2030 in millions. Looking at the picture we can state that two types of vehicles - cars and trains - share a common trend of gradual growing during the whole analyzed period. It is also worth mentioning that the number of those who use cars as well as trains remained steady during 2000-2010, around 7 million and 3 million respectively. It is expected that by 2030 the number of car and train users will reach almost 9 and 5 million relatively. On the other hand, the line, which describes the number of commuters who use buses, differs considerably. It stayed constant during the 1970-1980 but then declines rapidly till 2030, reaching its dip at the level near 3 million passengers in 2030. To sum up, it is clear that the most popular type of vehicle for UK workers for the period over 60 years stays cars. Also, while the number of people who use the car and train grow moderately, the number of bus users falls steadily.
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types of transport over the period from 1970 to 2030 in millions.

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cars
and
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trains
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share a common trend of gradual growing during the whole analyzed period. It is
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of those
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cars
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remained steady during 2000-2010, around 7
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. It is
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that by 2030 the
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users will reach almost 9 and 5
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, the line, which
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buses, differs
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that the most popular type of vehicle for UK workers for the period over 60 years stays
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