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the diagram illustrates how bees produce honey

the diagram illustrates how bees produce honey yrKM

This diagram shows how the bees produce the honey. It is clear from the diagram there are 7 steps that the bees follow to make honey which begins with the hive building and ends when the honey is ready to use. First, the bees try to build hives for them to live inside. After they finish building their home they leave the hives to wander in the garden where there are lots of roses and flowers. In the same time, they work together as one group to collect the nectar from the flowers. After that, they take it to their hive and put it inside the cells as we can see in fourth step. Turn to the next step when the hive be full they try to fan the cell by using their wings. As a result the water evaporate from the cells to produce the honey. At the end they get honey which is usable and produced and the steps are complete.

This diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 how the bees produce the honey. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 from the diagram there are 7 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
steps
 that the bees follow to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 honey which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatescommences
begins
 with the hive building and ends when the honey is ready to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
.

First
, the bees try to build hives for them to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 inside. After they finish building their home they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 the hives to wander in the garden where there are lots of roses and flowers. In the same time, they work together as one group to collect the nectar from the flowers. After that, they take it to their hive and put it inside the cells as we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 in fourth You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
. Turn to the next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
 when the hive be full they try to fan the cell by using their wings. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 a result the water evaporate from the cells to produce the honey.

At the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 honey which is usable and produced and the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
steps
 are complete. 