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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. 8oVP
The diagram shows the seven most important stages in the making of honey by bees. The process begins with the honey bees building a hive, and then finishes when the honey is ready to be collected and used. Firstly, the bees have to build a container. This is called a hive and it consists of many individually built cells. Next, the bees leave the hive in order to search for flowers. When they find a suitable flower, they collect the nectar from it, which is used to make honey. The nectar is then taken back to the hive where the production process can begin. First, it is put into cells. Then, following this, the nectar must be cooled down. In order to do this, the bees fan the nectar-filled cells with their wings. As a result, the nectar loses its water content and then finally, the honey is produced.
The diagram
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the seven most
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stages in the making of honey by bees. The process
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begins
with the honey bees building a hive, and then finishes when the honey is ready to
be collected
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used
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Firstly
, the bees
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have to
build a container. This
is called
a hive and it consists of
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many
individually
built cells.
Next
, the bees
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leave
the hive in order to search for flowers. When they find a suitable flower, they collect the
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nectar
from it, which is
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used
to
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make
honey.

The
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nectar
is then taken back to the hive where the production process can
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begin
.
First
, it
is put
into cells. Then, following this, the
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nectar
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must
be cooled
down. In order to do this, the bees fan the nectar-filled cells with their wings.
As a result
, the
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nectar
loses its water content and then
finally
, the honey
is produced
.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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