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The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. VJL3
A first glance at the bar chart provides data on the contribution of five various industries to the economy of Brazil over a timeframe of 2009 and 2019 with the prediction for 2029. From the overall prospective, it can be observed that the share of finance, food processing and oil, coal and gas was increasing, while two others experienced an equal decrease in the first two years. Moreover, it is anticipated that finance will be responsible for the most significant percentage of Brazil’s economy. The percentage of management of finance and oil, coal and gas had been just over 30% and 25% respectively before there was a notable rise by 5% in both industries over the next 10 years. Likewise, having comprised for one in ten per cent of the economy in 2009, the share of food production was twice as large in 2019. However, this field is expected to return to its figures for 2009 in ten years as the percentage of oil, coal and gas, whereas finance will account for more than 40 per cent, taking the leading position among others. The contribution of manufacturing and tourism was initially over 20% and 25% relatively, but it markedly declined by 5% to about 15 and 20% in 2019. Additionally, production is anticipated to comprise less percentage of the economy (5%), whereas tourism is likely to remain unchanged in 2029.
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first
glance at the bar chart provides data on the contribution of five various industries to the economy of Brazil
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over
a timeframe of 2009 and 2019 with the prediction for 2029.

From the
overall
prospective, it can
be observed
that the share of
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finance
, food processing and oil, coal and gas was increasing, while two others experienced an equal decrease in the
first
two years.
Moreover
, it
is anticipated
that
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finance
will be responsible for the most significant
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percentage
of Brazil’s economy.

The
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percentage
of management of
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finance
and oil, coal and gas had been
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just
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over
30% and 25%
respectively
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before
there was a notable rise by 5% in both industries
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over
the
next
10 years.
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, having comprised for one in ten per cent of the economy in 2009, the share of food production was twice as large in 2019.
However
, this field is
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expected
to return to its figures for 2009 in ten years as the
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percentage
of oil, coal and gas, whereas
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finance
will account for more than 40 per cent, taking the leading position among others.

The contribution of manufacturing and tourism was
initially
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over
20% and 25%
relatively
,
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but
it
markedly
declined by 5% to about 15 and 20% in 2019.
Additionally
, production
is anticipated
to comprise less
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percentage
of the economy (5%), whereas tourism is likely to remain unchanged in 2029.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

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