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The diagram gives information about the proportion of the people who đi regular exercise from six different group of age in Australia in 2010

The diagram gives information about the proportion of the people who đi regular exercise from six different group of age in Australia in 2010 0aXEG
The diagram gives information about the proportion of the people who đi regular exercise from six different group of age in Australia in 2010It is clear that, in 2010, Australia reached high percentage in physical activity of both women and men at the age from 15 to 65 and above. However, female still got higher proportion in physical activity than Australian male in 2010. As we can see from the chart, there was a huge amount of boys who was from 15 to 24 do exercise, reached at 52. 8. On the other hand, there was a slight declined in the percentage of Australian men who did regular physical activity at the age from 25 to 44 and reached a low at 39. 5 for whom in 35 to 44 years old. Then male who are from 45 years old and over experienced an insignificant went up in the percentage of doing exercise, increased from 43. 1 to 46. 7. Women, on the other hand, who were from 15 to 24 did physical exercise fewer than men, standed at 47. 7. Nevertheless, Australia female at 25 years old and over made up higher percentage of physical activity than male, reached peak of 53. 3 at the age group 45 to 54.
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