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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. 8bw5
The diagram illustrates the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks. Overall, the process of making carbonated drinks majorlyIncludes 5 steps I, e. , water cleaning, heating evaporation, and carbonation mixing filtering and filling, packaging. Finally, it is sent to supermarkets. At the begining, the raw water is cleaned by using filter before water softener is used and chemicals are added. The cleaned water are pumped to electric heaters and is eventually cooled where carbon dioxide is introduced. From there, the carbonated water is mixed along with coloring, syrup, and flavor and filtered again before filling into bottels and cans. Finally, these drinks are packed into boxes and delivered to supermarkets.
The diagram illustrates the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks.

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, the process of making carbonated drinks
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water
cleaning, heating evaporation, and carbonation mixing filtering and filling, packaging.
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, it is
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sent
to supermarkets. At the
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begining
, the raw
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water
is cleaned
by using filter
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before
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water
softener is
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used
and chemicals are
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added
. The cleaned
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water
are pumped
to electric heaters and is
eventually
cooled where carbon dioxide
is introduced
. From there, the carbonated
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water
is mixed
along with coloring, syrup, and flavor and filtered again
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before
filling into
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bottels
and cans.
Finally
, these drinks
are packed
into boxes and delivered to supermarkets.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
109 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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