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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. KPgN
The diagram represents the different stages involved in creating carbonated drinks. Overall, the entire process includes 5 different steps. It start with the cleansing of water and involves the production methodology followed by the packaging and delivery. The first action involved, is the cleaning of water by passing the raw water through a filter, continued with exposing to water softeners and chemicals. Once this is completed the cleaned water is then allowed to pass through a pump. The next process to be executed is to conduct the heating evaporation and carbonation mechanisms. Here, the water is pumped to an electric heater and it is combined with CO2 after passing through a cooling pipe. The next level involves the blending of colour, syrup and flavour to the carbonated water. After the mixing stage gets completed the processed drink is filtered and filled into bottles and cans. Finally this ready to drink soda is packed and shipped to the supermarket.
The diagram represents the
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different
stages involved in creating carbonated drinks.

Overall
, the entire process includes 5
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different
steps. It
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start
with the cleansing of
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water
and involves the production methodology followed by the packaging and delivery.

The
first
action involved, is the cleaning of
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water
by passing the raw
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water
through a filter, continued with exposing to
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water
softeners and chemicals.
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Once
this
is completed
the cleaned
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water
is then
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allowed
to pass through a pump. The
next
process to
be executed
is to conduct the heating evaporation and carbonation mechanisms. Here, the
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water
is pumped
to an electric heater and it
is combined
with CO2 after passing through a cooling pipe.

The
next
level involves the blending of
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colour
, syrup and
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flavour
to the carbonated
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water
. After the mixing stage
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gets
completed the processed drink
is filtered
and filled into bottles and cans.
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Finally
this ready to drink soda
is packed
and shipped to the supermarket.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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