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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. 0Q23
The diagram illustrates about the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks. Overall, the process of making carbonated drinks majorly include 5 steps i, e. , water cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, packaging. Finally it is send to supermarkets. The first stage is water cleaning, Where the water which are drained under houses are send to softener through filter. The filter will remove the dust particals and are cleaned by adding chemicals in softener. The cleaned water are pumped using pump. Next, the pumped are transferred to a electric heater where bacteria dies, and are cooled using cooling pipes which are send to a large container along with carbon dioxide. This is the second stage of production. Third stage involves mixing, where the outcome of second stage are mixed along with coloring, syrup and flavour and are send to filter where filtering takes place. The filtered water are impurities free and are good for health. Those purified water are filled in bottels and cans are packed in large boxes which is fourth stage of process. Finally, the packed boxes are sent to supermarkets by using fourwheeler.
The diagram illustrates about the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks.

Overall
, the process of making carbonated drinks
majorly
include 5 steps i, e.
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,
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water
cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, packaging.
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Finally
it is
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send
to supermarkets. The
first
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stage
is
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water
cleaning, Where the
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water
which
are drained
under
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houses
are
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send
to softener through filter. The filter will remove the dust
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particals
and
are cleaned
by adding chemicals in softener.
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The
cleaned
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water
are pumped
using pump.
Next
, the pumped
are transferred
to
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a
electric heater where bacteria
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dies
, and
are cooled
using cooling pipes which are
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send
to a large container along with carbon dioxide. This is the second
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stage
of production. Third
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stage
involves mixing, where the outcome of second
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stage
are mixed
along with coloring, syrup and
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flavour
and are
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send
to filter where filtering takes place. The filtered
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water
are impurities free and are
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good
for health. Those purified
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water
are filled
in
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bottels
and cans
are packed
in large boxes which is fourth
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stage
of process.
Finally
, the packed boxes are
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sent
to supermarkets by using
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fourwheeler
.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
188 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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