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The diagram describing about school children of age 5 to 12 years going to school by different ways of transport

The diagram describing about school children of age 5 to 12 years going to school by different ways of transport R2GYk
The bar graph illustrates the various modes of the transport to school in 1990 and 2010. The school kids using five ways of transport i. e. car, walking, cycling, bus and by walk and bus. Overall, the children using car has been increased a lot. The people who travel by bus has some what decreased but it is the only mean of transport with not much change. Horizontal axis is showing the how early aged people are going to convent. Vertical axis is picturizing the millions of trips per year. In 1990, the persons who are coming to school by car are having around 5 million trips on the contrary the same category people in 2010 has increased in the tips about 11 million. Walking kids are having more than 12 million trips and in this case in 2010 had a rapid decline and it was about the 6 million trips. There is also a slight drop in the trips of cycling in 1990 and 2010. Then by walking bus that is almost similar to cycling and nearly it is 6 million trips in 1990, However the in 2010 it is 3 million. Only the bus passengers constant and they are vey close and they are about 6. 5 million in 1990 and 5 million in 2010'
The bar graph illustrates the various modes of the transport to school in 1990 and 2010. The school kids using five ways of transport
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i. e.
car, walking, cycling, bus and by walk and bus.

Overall
, the children using car has
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people
who travel by bus has
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decreased
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mean of transport with not much
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change
. Horizontal axis is showing
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early aged
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people
are going to convent. Vertical axis is picturizing the
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millions
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trips
per year.

In 1990, the persons who are coming to school by car are having around 5
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million
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trips
on the contrary
the same category
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people
in 2010 has increased in the tips about 11
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million
. Walking kids are having more than 12
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million
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trips
and
in this case
in 2010 had a rapid decline and it was about the 6
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million
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trips
. There is
also
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trips
of cycling in 1990 and 2010. Then by walking bus
that is
almost similar to cycling and
nearly
it is 6
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million
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in 1990,
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the in 2010 it is 3
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.
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the bus passengers
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