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examining the bar chart of academic staff in year 2012

The component bar chart above demonstrates the percentage value of academic staffs in a university with seven faculties in the year 2012 and it also distinguishes the staffs into male and female. When noticing the male staff in the graph, it shows that highest number of female staffs are working for engineering faculty which is 85%. It is followed by 65% in business faculty and 63% in science faculty. The least number of female staffs are from education faculty, which is 60% less than engineering sector. While looking at female academics staffs in year 2012, the education sector occupies the highest staffs with 75% which has the lowest male staffs. The second highest male academic employees are of arts sector which is 55% and the least is 25% in engineering faculty. To examine, the graph shows that male academic staffs are employed more when compared to female academic staffs in 2012. The engineering sector is highly employed with 85% of male but the least of 15% female, which is the vital cause for the above differentiation.
The component bar chart above demonstrates the percentage value of
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academic
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staffs
in a university with seven faculties in the year 2012 and it
also
distinguishes the
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staffs
into male and female.

When noticing the male
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staff
in the graph, it
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that highest number of
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female
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staffs
are working for
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engineering
faculty which is 85%. It
is followed
by 65% in business faculty and 63% in science faculty. The least number of
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female
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staffs
are from education faculty, which is 60% less than
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engineering
sector.

While looking at
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female
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academics
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in year 2012, the education sector occupies the highest
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with 75% which has the lowest male
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. The second highest male
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employees are of arts sector which is 55% and the least is 25% in
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engineering
faculty.

To examine, the graph
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that male
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are employed
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female
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in 2012. The
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sector is
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the least of 15%
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, which is the vital cause for the above differentiation.
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