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The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment XOor
The diagram illustrates the information about different stages of goods manufacturing process, it also depicts the feedback of consumers. To initiate the manufacturing process first consumer research the product which they have to manufacture. After the product research starts the designing of the product. Next they purchase Raw material ans manufacturing components and store in the accurate temperature. After the design and store the raw material they plan the production and product goes to the assembly for ready the product. After the all production it goes to in inspection and testing that the product produced is accurate or not. After the all process product goes in packing and then dispatch through transportation to the companies. Then companies sales the product to the consumers. When product is ready for market then manufacturer waiting for the feedback. When goods sales in the market then they research in the market for feedback and give the advertisement on television, newspaper or radio for product sale and reviews of client.
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different
stages of
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goods
manufacturing process, it
also
depicts the feedback of consumers.

To initiate the manufacturing process
first
consumer research the
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product
which they
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have to
manufacture.
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After
the
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product
research
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starts
the designing of the
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product
.
Next
they
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purchase
Raw material ans manufacturing components and store in the accurate temperature. After the design and store the raw material they plan the production and
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product
goes to the assembly for ready the
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product
. After the all production it goes to in inspection and testing that the
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product
produced is accurate or not.
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After
the all process
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product
goes in packing and then dispatch through transportation to the
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companies
. Then
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companies
sales the
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product
to the consumers.

When
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product
is ready for market then manufacturer waiting for the feedback. When
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goods
sales in the market then they research in the market for feedback and give the advertisement on television, newspaper or radio for
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product
sale and reviews of client.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment

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165 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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