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The diagram below shows the stages in the process of canning fruits.

The diagram highlights the steps involved in the production of canned fruits. There are several stages that take place from picking the fruit to sending it to the stores to be sold. After the fruit is handpicked, it is transported to the factory by truck. At the canning facility, it is washed and checked to make sure that it has suitable quality. Fruit, that passes the control stage, goes to the next step. In the next part of the process, the fruit is first peeled and cut into wedges. Now wedges are ready to be put into cans with syrup, which are then sealed. Following this, the cans are heating at a high temperature, which is high enough to cook the fruit and sterilise the cans. Once this has done, the cans are labelled and then placed in storage. Finally, the finished product can be transported to shops, cafes and so on. The canning process aim is to guaranty safety and quality of the fruit, and to be sure of it, while eating.
The diagram highlights the steps involved in the production of canned
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fruits
. There are several stages that take place from picking the
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fruit
to sending it to the stores to
be sold
. After the
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fruit
is handpicked
, it
is transported
to the factory by truck. At the canning facility, it
is washed
and
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checked
to
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make
sure that it has suitable quality.
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Fruit
, that passes the control stage, goes to the
next
step. In the
next
part of the process, the
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fruit
is
first
peeled and
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cut
into wedges.
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Now
wedges are ready to
be put
into
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cans
with syrup, which are then sealed. Following this, the
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cans
are heating at a high temperature, which is high
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enough
to cook the
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fruit
and
Possible spelling mistake. 'sterilise' is British English.
sterilise
the
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cans
. Once this has done, the
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cans
are labelled
and then placed in storage.
Finally
, the finished product
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can
be transported
to shops,
'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"
cafes
and
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so
on. The canning process aim is to guaranty safety and quality of the
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fruit
, and to be sure of it, while eating.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages in the process of canning fruits.

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6.0
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