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The diagram below shows the purification of sea water

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The report reveals that how the salty water is purify by following a simple process. Overall, according to the source (the yachtsman's emergency handbook: the complete survival manual " hollander, neil & mertes harald 1980. Angus & robertson, us. ), Very basic equipment are required, but the easy steps of the procedure need to be followed properly for the precise outcome. The required equipment are a heat source, a pot, a metal funnel, a length of pipe and a piece of cloth. The pot full of salty water is placed on the gas stove. The funnel is fixed on the surface of the pot in such a way that the open site covers whole of the surface area of the pot. At the narrow end of the funnel, the length of pipe is fixed, and in the middle of this pipe, a piece of cloth is wrapped that is dampened by pouring water where the formula worse. By turning on the flame, once the water is heated edequatily, it turns into vapour, while the salt remain at the bottom. This vapour becomes the fresh water when it comes into the contact of the cold area of the length of the pipe. This fresh water is collected in the bucket.
The report reveals that how the salty
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is
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by following a simple process.
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hollander
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1980. Angus &
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basic equipment
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the easy steps of the procedure need to
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properly
for the precise outcome. The required equipment are a heat source, a
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pot
, a metal funnel, a length of
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pipe
and a piece of cloth. The
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pot
full of salty
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water
is placed
on the gas stove.
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The
funnel is
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fixed
on the surface of the
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pot
in such a way that the open site covers whole of the surface area of the
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pot
. At the narrow
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end
of the funnel, the length of
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pipe
is
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fixed
, and in the middle of this
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, a piece of cloth
is wrapped
that
is dampened
by pouring
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water
where the formula worse. By turning on the flame, once the
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water
is heated
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edequatily
, it turns into
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vapour
, while the salt remain at the bottom. This
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becomes the fresh
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comes
into the contact of the
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cold
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. This fresh
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is collected
in the bucket.
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