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The charts illustrate data about rainfall and temperatures in Brasilia and Recife, two different cities of Brazil. The information is referred to a whole year. It is also present additional data about hours of sunshine and days with thunder. The most noticeable feature is that in Brasilia rainfall was more consistent both in quantity and frequency, while in Recife there were less rainy days. Moreover, in Recife temperatures were generally higher, whilst in RECIFE they presented a wider range: from freezing to 40°. In Brasilia rainy days were more abundant from September to April, reaching the peak of 250 mm in December, while the same amount was achieved in Recife in June and July. However, Brasilia presented the minimum days of rainfall from June to August (2-3), when Recife never had less than 10 days of rainfall. Temperatures in Recife had fluctuations between 25° and 30° for the whole year, never touching cold or freezing temperatures. On the other hand, in Brasilia temperatures WERE QUITE EXTREME AND fell to very low degrees in spring and summer, reaching the minimum of 0° in June.
The charts illustrate data about rainfall and
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in
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Brasilia
and Recife, two
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different
cities of Brazil. The information
is referred
to a whole year. It is
also
present additional data about hours of sunshine and days with thunder. The most noticeable feature is that in
'Brasilia' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "Brasília"
Brasilia
rainfall was more consistent both in quantity and frequency, while in Recife there were less rainy days.
Moreover
, in Recife
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temperatures
were
generally
higher, whilst in RECIFE they presented a wider range: from freezing to 40°.

In
'Brasilia' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "Brasília"
Brasilia
rainy days were more abundant from September to April, reaching the peak of 250 mm in December, while the same amount
was achieved
in Recife in June and July.
However
,
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Brasilia
presented the minimum days of rainfall from June to August (2-3), when Recife never had less than 10 days of rainfall.

Temperatures in Recife had fluctuations between 25° and 30° for the whole year, never touching
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or freezing
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On the other hand
, in
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Brasilia
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temperatures
WERE QUITE EXTREME AND fell to
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low degrees in spring and summer, reaching the minimum of 0° in June.
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IELTS academic weather in two different brazilian cities

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