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The diagram below shows the process of producing raisins from grapes.

The diagram below shows the process of producing raisins from grapes. NmD82

The given picture illustrates how to make grapes into raisins. Overall, there are seven stages, which starts with harvesting the grapes and ending up with market them. First of all, harvest grapes from where the grapes are grown. After that, the collected grapes are dried in the sun for 2 until 3 weeks. The grapes will shrink into raisins after it is dried then transported to the factory. In the next stage, the raisins must be cleaned to separate the fruit from the stalk and then washed with running water. Afterwards, the raisins are sorted according to size, which is big and small. In the subsequent stage, the raisins are packed and they can be put into a variety of packaging. Raisins that are in the small packaging will be distributed to grocery stores whilst the big one will be distributed to commercial bakeries or it can be exported to other countries.

The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 picture illustrates how to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
 into raisins. Overall
, there are seven stages, which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
 with harvesting the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
 and ending up with market them.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, harvest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
 from where the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
are grown
. After that, the collected You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
are dried
 in the sun for 2 until 3 weeks. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwine
grapes
 will shrink into raisins after it is dried
 then transported to the factory. In the next
 stage, the raisins This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
be cleaned
 to separate the fruit from the stalk and then washed with running water. Afterwards, the raisins are sorted
 according to size, which is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
.

In the subsequent stage, the raisins are Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).packed, and
packed and
 they can be put
 into a variety of packaging. Raisins that are in the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 packaging will be distributed
 to grocery stores whilst the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 one will be distributed
 to commercial bakeries or it can be exported
 to other countries. 