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The diagram below shows the plan of a medical center in 2008 and 2010.

The diagram below shows the plan of a medical center in 2008 and 2010. 7J9nn
The provided layouts elucidate the planning of a medical center. A comparison has been made between 2008 and 2010. Overall, a quick glance at the pictures reveals that, in 2010 place for medical center was expanding due to refurbishment. In addition, there were a number of area which were untouched. First and foremost, in 2008, upper side of medical center provided for not only treatment room but also three doctor's office, however, in 2010, this area reconstructed, decreased size of doctor's office and it replaced by one more office as well as store room in the East side on map. Last but not the least, latter on the Southern side at left corner built new study room also, mother and child area. In contrast, former left blanks there. Furthermore, in the East side, between the store room and laboratory provide space for pharmacy in 2010. Although, it was nothing to give built in 2008. Eventually, there were might be a numerous places which were as it was; namely- main entrance, waiting room, staff office, reception, laboratory. Which made in middle of these area and for laboratory gave space at right corner on the Southern side.
The provided layouts elucidate the planning of a medical center. A comparison has
been made
between 2008 and 2010.

Overall
, a quick glance at the pictures reveals that, in 2010 place for medical center was expanding due to refurbishment.
In addition
, there were a number of
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area
which
were untouched
.

First
and foremost, in 2008, upper side of medical center provided for not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
treatment
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room
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but
also
three
Incorrect singular possessive form after the number (three). Did you mean "doctors" or "doctors'"?
doctor's
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office
,
however
, in 2010, this
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area
reconstructed, decreased size of doctor's
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office
and it replaced by one more
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office
as well
as store
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room
in the East side on map. Last
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but
not the least, latter on the Southern side at
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left
corner built new study
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room
also
, mother and child
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area
.
In contrast
, former
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left
blanks there.

Furthermore
, in the East side, between the store
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room
and laboratory provide space for pharmacy in 2010.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, it was nothing to give built in 2008.
Eventually
, there
Did you mean "where might be"?
were might be
a numerous
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places
which were as it was;
namely
- main entrance, waiting
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room
, staff
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office
, reception, laboratory. Which made in middle of these
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area
and for laboratory gave space at right corner on the Southern side.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the plan of a medical center in 2008 and 2010.

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