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The diagram below shows the manufacturing, processing and production of dairy products

The diagram below shows the manufacturing, processing and production of dairy products xOWX6

The diagram illustrates, in contrast, to various stages involved. with regard, to production and processing of four kind of dairy products. such as milk, cheese, cream and butter respectively. for sale in supermarkets and shops. Overall, it can be observed, that there are eight stages involved in this process. Firstly, cows graze grass on the field. Followed, by other six stages which then eventually, lead to storage of this dairy products in supermarket and kiosk for sale. Firstly, cows graze grass in the field. Then transferred to machine where milking will be done twice a day. Later, the milk will be stored in the refrigeration tank to maintain the required, temperature. Furthermore, stored milk is transferred to tanker which further, send to dairy farm. Secondly, milk will further, pasteurized in dairy farm. As a result, milk, cheese, cream and butter will, be obtain. Subsequently, the obtained products will be stored in supermarkets and shops. for consumers to purchase.

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, to various stages involved. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterWith
with
 regard, to production and processing of four Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: "kinds".kinds
kind
 of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 products. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterSuch
such
 as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
, cheese, cream and butter respectively
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFor
for
 sale in supermarkets and shops.

Overall
, it can be observed
, that there are eight stages involved in this process. Firstly
, cows graze grass on the field. Followed, by other six stages which then eventually
, lead to storage of this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 products in supermarket and kiosk for sale.

Firstly
, cows graze grass in the field. Then transferred to machine where milking will be done
 twice a day. Later, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 will be stored
 in the refrigeration tank to maintain the required, temperature. Furthermore
, stored You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
is transferred
 to tanker which further
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 farm.

Secondly
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 will further
, pasteurized in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 farm. As a result
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
, cheese, cream and butter will, be Consider using a past participle here: "obtained".obtained
obtain
. Subsequently
, the obtained products will be stored
 in supermarkets and shops. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFor
for
 consumers to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
. 