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the diagram below shows the English city Bristol deals with water pollution.

the diagram below shows the English city Bristol deals with water pollution. gaa7
The diagram shows the flow of clean and dirty water throughout the city of Bristol. Initially, the process begins with fresh water, fit for human consumption. As soon as it is used by humans, it becomes dirty and flows to three (3) separate destinations: rivers and streams, sewage treatment plants and the ocean. The diagram shows that rivers and streams receive a mixture of clean and dirty water. The water which has been used by humans is the dirty water and the clean water flows from sewage treatment plants. The diagram also shows that dirty water is dumped into the ocean via rivers and streams. Thus, the ocean receives an input of dirty water from rivers/streams and water used directly by humans. Some of the dirty water flowing in rivers and streams does not end up in oceans it flows to reservoirs or goes directly to a water treatment plant. This water is then recycled and made ready for human use.
The diagram
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water
throughout the city of Bristol.
Initially
, the process
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with fresh
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water
, fit for
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human
consumption. As
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soon
as it is
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used
by
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humans
, it becomes
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dirty
and
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flows
to three (3) separate destinations:
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rivers
and
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streams
, sewage treatment plants and the ocean.

The diagram
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that
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rivers
and
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streams
receive a mixture of clean and
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dirty
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water
. The
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water
which has been
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used
by
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humans
is the
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dirty
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water
and the clean
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water
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flows
from sewage treatment plants.
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also
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that
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is dumped
into the ocean via
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rivers
and
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streams
.
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, the ocean receives an input of
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dirty
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water
from rivers/streams and
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water
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used
directly
by humans.

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flowing in
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streams
does not
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end
up in oceans it
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flows
to reservoirs or goes
directly
to a
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water
treatment plant. This
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water
is then recycled and made ready for
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human
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IELTS academic the diagram below shows the English city Bristol deals with water pollution.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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