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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A friend in need is a friend indeed. Everyone will have at least one friend with whom one will share one’s personal space. According to me, a friend should be both a well-wisher and a critic. It is fine for a friend to disagree with me at times. So that we can have a view of both sides of the coin. When I am doing good and on the right track, she should pat my back to boost my energy. When there is a discussion, I wanted her to give me both the pros and cons of the situation and guide me. A year ago, I have decided to buy a luxurious car and I had discussed it with my friend. By that time, she inquired about my salary and the savings I had in hand. Then, she advised me to go for a budgeted car as it is a depreciation property and we should not be wasting so much of our money on it. Then, I had given a thought about it and decided to go for a budgeted car and I am feeling happy that I did not waste my money by purchasing a luxurious one. I am glad that she did not refrain in advising me. If my friend would have not disagreed with my opinion then, I would have gone for a costly car which might have resulted in a huge EMI burdening me. So, in my opinion, it is fine if a friend disagrees and takes you in the right path.
A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
in need is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
indeed
. Everyone will have at least one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
with whom one will share one’s personal space.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using “in my opinion” or “I think”.
According to me
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
should be both a well-wisher and a critic. It is fine for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
to disagree with me at times.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
we can have a view of both sides of the coin. When I am doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and on the right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
, she should pat my back to boost my energy. When there is a discussion, I wanted her to give me both the pros and cons of the situation and guide me.

A year ago, I have decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a luxurious
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
and I had discussed it with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
. By that time, she inquired about my salary and the savings I had in hand. Then, she advised me to go for a budgeted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
as it is a depreciation
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
property and
we should not be wasting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much of our money on it. Then, I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
about it and decided to go for a budgeted
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
car and
I am feeling happy that I did not waste my money by purchasing a luxurious one. I am glad that she did not refrain in advising me. If my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
Consider removing ‘would’. (Usually, ‘would’ does not occur in a conditional clause, unless to make a request or give a polite order.)
would have
not disagreed with my opinion then, I would have gone for a costly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
which might have resulted in a huge EMI burdening me.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, in my opinion, it is fine if a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
disagrees and takes you in the right path.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
256 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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