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The diagram below shows information about performance of sector wise indexes in India from 2000 to 2010

The diagram below shows information about performance of sector wise indexes in India from 2000 to 2010 KGq51
The given line graph provides trends in various sector-specific indices over eleven years in India In sector, Information Technology was at the index of 600 in 2000. But got decreased to 400 indexes in 2002. And unfortunately took a high rise towards 1000 index and reached till 1100 index in the year of 2010. Furthermore, consumer goods have the highest index among others in beginning at 900 in 2000. After many fluctuations in further years, peaked to 1100 index only in 2010 In addition to it, the Real estate was the lowest standing index by 200 in 2000. For 3 years it was constant and suddenly it took the rose and reach till 900 indexes in 2010. Meanwhile, Pharamaceuticlas was steadily growing from 700 to 1000 in 2000 and 2010 respectively. Finally, it was clear that all sectors showed gains over the past eleven years on the charts, however, real estate and information technology were outperformers over other sectors
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line graph provides trends in various sector-specific indices over eleven years in India

In sector, Information Technology was at the
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of 600 in 2000.
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decreased to 400
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in 2002. And unfortunately took a high rise towards 1000
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index
and reached till 1100
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in the
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of 2010.
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, consumer
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have the highest
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among others in beginning at 900 in 2000. After
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fluctuations in
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years, peaked to 1100
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index
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in 2010

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to it, the Real estate was the lowest standing
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by 200 in 2000. For 3 years it was constant and
suddenly
it took the rose and reach till 900
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indexes
in 2010. Meanwhile,
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Pharamaceuticlas
was
steadily
growing from 700 to 1000 in 2000 and 2010
respectively
.

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, it was
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that all sectors
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gains over the past eleven years on the charts,
however
, real estate and information technology were
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outperformers
over other sectors
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