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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given picture represents the steps that make rainwater drinkable in an Australian town, including multiple actions like filtering, storaging, treating and adding of chimicals substances. Firstly, rainfall must occur and rainwater must drain in buildings pipes, which are united in a wide one above our floor. Then, this large pipe brings water into a filter that eliminates the first unwanted elements of raw water. Later, filtered water goes down, continuing its path in a smaller pipe, and encounters a huge storage area where large amount of water is contained. After the storage phase, a horizontal pipe allows water to move in another container with same dimension as the previous one, where the water is treated with chemicals. The water is broght back up in the building trough a vertical pipe and is drunk by people using fountains. Thanks to this process the drinking water can be obtained from rainfall and the water supply problem can be solved.
The
given
picture represents the steps that
make
rainwater drinkable in an Australian town, including multiple actions like filtering,
storaging
, treating and adding of
chimicals
substances.

Firstly
, rainfall
must
occur and rainwater
must
drain in buildings
pipes
, which
are united
in a wide one above our floor. Then, this large
pipe
brings
water
into a filter that eliminates the
first
unwanted elements of raw
water
. Later, filtered
water
goes down, continuing its path in a smaller
pipe
, and encounters a huge storage area where large amount of
water
is contained
. After the storage phase, a horizontal
pipe
allows
water
to
move
in another container with same dimension as the previous one, where the
water
is treated
with chemicals. The
water
is
broght
back up in the building trough a vertical
pipe
and
is drunk
by
people
using fountains. Thanks to this process the drinking
water
can
be obtained
from rainfall and the
water
supply problem can
be solved
.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
158 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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