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The diagram below shows how online purchases are made.

The diagram below shows how online purchases are made. b2mrW
The given flowchart depicts that the information of online purchase and how it made by various steps. It is evidently seen that, the online shopping is done by buyer and purchase of goods taken place on credit purpose whereas, merchant company check the identity through which wire is belongs to and available funds. In this stage credit card can be accepted or rejected. In case of credit card being accepted the given order is successful then written merchant may request to credit company for money. The last stage is credit firm sends money to retail business. On the flip side, the card is rejected then, the merchant will receive the notification from credit company. If order decline message will send to merchant afterthat, merchant passed it to customer about the cancellation of particular product. Overall, when purchase procedure accepted that will be four main stage and in case of rejection there will be three stages.
The
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given
flowchart depicts that the information of online
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purchase
and how it made by various steps.

It is
evidently
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seen
that, the online shopping
is done
by buyer and
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purchase
of
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goods
taken place on
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credit
purpose whereas,
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merchant
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company
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check
the identity through which wire is belongs to and available funds. In this
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stage
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credit
card can be
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accepted
or rejected. In case of
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credit
card being
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accepted
the
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given
order is successful then written
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merchant
may request to
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credit
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company
for money. The last
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stage
is
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credit
firm
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sends
money to retail business.

On the flip side, the card
is rejected
then, the
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merchant
will receive the notification from
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credit
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company
. If order decline message will
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send
to
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merchant
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afterthat
,
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merchant
passed it to customer about the cancellation of particular product.

Overall
, when
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purchase
procedure
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accepted
that will be four main
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stage
and in case of rejection there will be three
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stages
.

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how online purchases are made.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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