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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The given picture illustrates the process by which instant noodles are produced. Overall, it is clear that there are 8 stages in this linear process, commencing with storing flour in silos and ending with labeling and sealing cups. At the first stage of this process, flour is pumped from a truck into tower silos for storage before being put into a mixing machine, where it is mixed with a combination of water and oil. After this stage has been completed, the resulting mixture is rolled over to create dough sheets, and then going through a machine to be separated into strips. During the next stage, these dough strips are molded into noodles discs, after which they are cooked with oil and left to dry. Following this, these dried noodles discs, together with vegetables and spices, are put into cups, and the process finally ends with these cups being labeled and sealed.
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stages
in this linear
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process
, commencing with storing flour in silos and ending with labeling and sealing cups.

At the
first
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stage
of this
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process
, flour
is pumped
from a truck into tower silos for storage
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before
being put
into a mixing machine, where it
is mixed
with a combination of water and oil. After this
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stage
has
been completed
, the resulting mixture
is rolled
over to create dough sheets, and then going through a machine to
be separated
into strips.

During the
next
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stage
, these dough strips
are molded
into noodles discs, after which they
are cooked
with oil and
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left
to dry. Following this, these dried noodles discs, together with vegetables and spices,
are put
into cups, and the
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process
finally
ends with these cups
being labeled
and sealed.
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