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the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

The picture details the manufacturing process for instant noodles. Overall, this entirely man-made operation can be divided into 4 main stages beginning with storage of raw ingredients, assembling the dry noodles, cooking and finally packaging for later consumption. Instant noodles start in storage silos where the flour is kept. The flour is transported, along with water and oil from another source, to the mixers and rolled into sheets of dough beginning the assembly line steps. These sheets are cut into strips with factory machinery and then formed into compact ‘Noodles discs’ to be fried in oil, left to dry and ultimately placed in cups along with assorted vegetables and spices. The final preparation step is to label and seal the contents so that the end product is ready for retail.
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the manufacturing process for instant
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noodles
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entirely
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-made operation can
be divided
into 4 main stages beginning with storage of raw ingredients, assembling the dry
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noodles
, cooking and
finally
packaging for later consumption.

Instant
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noodles
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start
in storage silos where the flour is
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kept
. The flour
is transported
, along with water and oil from another source, to the mixers and rolled into sheets of dough beginning the assembly line steps. These sheets are
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cut
into strips with factory machinery and then formed into compact
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‘Noodles
discs’ to
be fried
in oil,
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left
to dry and
ultimately
placed in cups along with assorted vegetables and spices.

The final preparation step is to label and seal the contents
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product is ready for retail.

IELTS academic the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

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  American English
3 paragraphs
130 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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