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the diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production

the diagram below shows how honey is made in small-scale commercial production QVbpP

The given diagram represents the various stages involved in the production of honey in minor trading. As can be seen, the process consists of 2 main steps, that involve the process by which honey is produced in nature and the use of human honey for commercial purposes. As can be seen in the diagram, the essential role of bees in honey production cannot be denied. First, the necessary amount of nectar will be collected for the whole process. Then, it will be brought back to the hive for the later steps. After that, some bees have the responsibility of drying honey by flapping their wings to create wind to increase evaporation in the honey. At the end of the bee's process, the amount of honey is sealed clean in the cells with some types of wax. The role of people in the production process is also very momentous. Firstly, the honeycombs are collected for honey production by people. Secondly, it is pressed to collect honey by a large machine. After that, people pour the pressed honey into a big sump tank, heating about 45-50 degrees Celsius. Then this mixture is filtered to remove dirt by a sieve tank, so what we get is near-pure honey in the settling tank, keeping for about 4 days. Finally, honey is bottled in jars and taken away to be consumed in restaurants and shops.

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