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The Diagram Below Shows How Geothermal Energy Is Used to Produce Electricity

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The diagram illustrates information about a green power plant which convert underground heat energy into electricity. Overall, the water is a primary part of the which transfer heat from underground to power plant changing his shape in to steam. Five major steps involve in this process. Turbine is a main component which covert heat energy into mechanical energy. The picture shows that the process start with cold water, which dropped in a 4. 5 Km long tunnel. After that it pumped into pours of earth with high pressure to absorb heat energy in it. However it goes through hot rocks, mud and sand. Other side of plant it collect in to well, where pump move in condenser that convert in Steam with significant high pressure chamber. At last stage this steam will go into turbine. The Turbine drive with steam pressure which makes mechanical energy. Lastly, the mechanical force power to generator which in to electricity that transfer in house with help electric poll.
The diagram illustrates information about a green power plant which convert underground
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heat
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energy
into electricity.

Overall
, the water is a primary part of the which transfer
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heat
from underground to power plant changing his shape in to steam. Five major steps involve in this process. Turbine is a main component which covert
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heat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
into mechanical energy.

The picture
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shows
that the process
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start
with
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cold
water, which dropped in a 4. 5 Km long tunnel.
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that it pumped into pours of earth with high pressure to absorb
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heat
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energy
in it.
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However
it goes through hot rocks, mud and sand. Other side of plant it
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collect
in to well, where pump
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move
in condenser that convert in Steam with significant high pressure chamber. At last stage this steam will go into turbine. The Turbine drive with steam pressure which
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makes
mechanical
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energy
.
Lastly
, the mechanical force power to generator which in to electricity that transfer in
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house
with
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electric poll.
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