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The diagram below shows how coal is used to generate electricity

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The diagram illustrates how to produce electricity with coal. Overall there are 7 stages in the diagram from the moment when coal meaning to the power line process. Initially, coal is thrown to pulveriser where coal is crushed to little pieces and there goes to the furnace. And there are coal pieces burn and the thermal energy from the burning coal is used to boil water and generate steam. From that moment steam pushes the blades of the turbine, which connect with the generator, that gives electricity to the transformer. Thereby the electric current is sent through the power lines to businesses and homes.

The diagram illustrates how to produce electricity with coal. Overall
 there are 7 stages in the diagram from the moment when coal meaning to the power line process.

Initially
, coal is thrown
 to Possible spelling mistake. 'pulveriser' is British English.pulverizer
pulveriser
 where coal is crushed
 to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 pieces and there goes to the furnace. And there are coal pieces burn and the thermal energy from the burning coal is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to boil water and generate steam.

From that moment steam pushes the blades of the turbine, which connect with the generator, that gives electricity to the transformer. Thereby the electric This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 through the power lines to businesses and homes. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how coal is used to generate electricity

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American English

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104 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

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