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The diagram below show the present college and its plan in 2025 for proposed.

The diagram below show the present college and its plan in 2025 for proposed. 8xQ0w
The pictures below illustrate the various changes that will take place within college layout at the present to 2025 in the future. Overall, the most striking changes over the school campus is demolition of huge garden on the north side. Moreover, the car park will be expanded in 2025 with more space for a numerous cars. Obviously, the wider campus space is came from the surrounded footpath at both top and left side. In the future, the college entrance would be moved in the opposite side, which is located in front of the road. The replacement of main gate lead to the change of toilets to the north of the campus. The small older library is moved to larger location in the right of the entrance. The middle room reception is convert to the 2 small classrooms in the right and be moved near to the yard on the entrance path. The lunch area still be remain in the same place; however, there is a new shop is constructed on the top right corner of the campus.
The pictures below illustrate the various
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changes
that will take place within college layout at the present to 2025 in the future.

Overall
, the most striking
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changes
over the school
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campus
is demolition of huge garden on the north side.
Moreover
, the car park will
be expanded
in 2025 with more space for a numerous
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "car"?
cars
.

Obviously
, the wider
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campus
space is
Consider using a past participle here: "come".
came
from the surrounded footpath at both top and
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left
side. In the future, the college entrance would be
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moved
in the opposite side, which
is located
in front of the road. The replacement of main gate lead to the
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change
of toilets to the north of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
. The
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small
older library is
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moved
to larger location in the right of the entrance.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
middle room reception is convert to the 2
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small
classrooms in the right and be
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moved
near to the yard on the entrance path.
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The
lunch area
still
be
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remain
in the same place;
however
, there is a new shop
is constructed
The usual prepositions to use with a corner "in" not "on". Did you mean "in the top right corner"?
on the top right corner
of the
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campus
.

IELTS academic The diagram below show the present college and its plan in 2025 for proposed.

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