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The diagram below show the information regarding the average hours of unpaid work per week

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The bar chart provides the information regarding the average hours of unpaid work do by married man and woman in various categories. Overall, it can be evident that the working hours spend by women is more. Whereas man spend less working hours. At a fleeting glance, it can be clearly seen that married women who have no children do approximately 30 hours per week for unpaid work. whereas, man spend almost 18 hours per week. Furthermore, the married women with one or two children do the unpaid work for about 30 hours each week. However man doing the work in same category near 18 hours every week. Intrestengly, those women have three or more children they spend for unpaid work is more around 55 hours. However, man spend the less hours for this task approximately 15 hours for unpaid work each week.
The bar chart provides the information regarding the average
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do by married
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and woman in various categories.
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less working
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. At a fleeting glance, it can be
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for unpaid
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is more around 55
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