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bar chart illustrates the mean precipitation in twelve months while the line graph demonstrates the temperature

bar chart illustrates the mean precipitation in twelve months while the line graph demonstrates the temperature j5DYL

The provided bar chart illustrates the mean precipitation in twelve months while the line graph demonstrates the temperature which has been recorded in a certain territory of East Africa. Generally, it can be observed that both the bar chart and line graph show the fluctuated tendency. The largest gap to be seen is the figure of rainfall which has been received on April, roughly 270. In the mean time, the hottest degree has been seen is on March with 27 degree. At the beginning of the year, the volume of rain is 20 mm and decreases slightly in the month after to approximately 15mm. However, the rainfall in March witness an increase to nearly 100mm and then experience a proliferation to 270 mm but then rapidly goes down to nearly 0 in three months subsequently. In addition, October and November seem to be unchanged in the number of rain liters. When it come to the temperature, it can be supervised that in three month at the beginning show the upward trend, from 21 to 27 degree. On the other hand, from April to Jun witnesses an dramatically decline and then goes up again. Additionally, in September and November, the temperature experiences invariably.

The provided bar chart illustrates the mean precipitation in twelve You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointgenerationpastsecondturnspace
months
 while the line graph demonstrates the temperature which has been recorded
 in a certain territory of East Africa.

Generally
, it can be observed
 that both the bar chart and line graph This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 the fluctuated tendency. The largest gap to be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 is the figure of rainfall which has been received
 on April, roughly 270. In the Did you mean "meantime" (=the period of time between two things)?meantime
mean time
, the hottest degree has been This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 is on March with 27 degree.

At the beginning of the year, the volume of rain is 20 mm and decreases slightly
 in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointgenerationpastsecondturnspace
month
 after to approximately Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "15 mm"15 mm
15mm
. However
, the rainfall in March witness an increase to nearly
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "100 mm"100 mm
100mm
 and then experience a proliferation to 270 mm This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 then rapidly
 goes down to nearly
 0 in three You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpointgenerationpastsecondturnspace
months
subsequently
. In addition
, October and November seem to be unchanged
 in the number of rain liters.

When it Did you mean "comes"?comes
come
 to the temperature, it can be supervised
 that in three Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: "months".months
month
 at the beginning This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 the upward trend, from 21 to 27 degree. On the other hand
, from April to Jun witnesses Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'a
an
You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('decline') instead of another adjective.
dramatically decline
 and then goes up again. Additionally
, in September and November, the temperature experiences invariably
. 