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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

In 1995, urban Chinese spent more on Food compare to other categories. There was slight incline and decline in other categories compared to 2011 trend. Because the people after 2011 was focusing to earn money for survival. But there is completly decline trend observed in Food comparing 1995 and 2011. Food consumption decreased by 14% moreover the contribution increased in other categories. Others category was increased compared to 1995 consumption. As there is growth in population, Resedential consumption increased by 1% due to that there is an spike in Recreation by 2%. As we observed there is a growth in population, Transporation consumption increased and people used to buy their own personal vehicles for convienence and luxury purpose. Due to release of C02 from Vehices, air pollution got increased which resulting in illness. So to get ride of that Medicine consumption hit the sky. No change in Household facilities where people replacing the old appliances, furtniture and kitchen equipment where size is compressed using advanced technology. Clothing consumption got decreased due to increased in quality and trend of clothes. We can summarize this comparison by stating that Urban consumption in 2011 is increased compared to 1995.
In 1995, urban Chinese spent more on Food compare to other categories. There was slight incline and decline in other categories compared to 2011 trend.
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after 2011 was focusing to earn money for survival.

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decline trend observed in Food comparing 1995 and 2011. Food
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decreased by 14%
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the contribution
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increased
in other categories.

Others category was
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increased
compared to 1995
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consumption
. As there is growth in population,
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Resedential
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consumption
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increased
by 1% due to that there is
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spike in Recreation by 2%.

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Transporation
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consumption
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increased
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people
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used
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personal vehicles for
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convienence
and luxury purpose.

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, air pollution
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which resulting in illness.

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of that Medicine
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consumption
hit the sky.

No
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change
in Household facilities where
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replacing the
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old
appliances,
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furtniture
and kitchen equipment where size
is compressed
using advanced technology. Clothing
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consumption
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got
decreased due to
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increased
in quality and trend of clothes.

We can summarize this comparison by stating that Urban
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consumption
in 2011 is
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increased
compared to 1995.
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196 words
5.5
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