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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

Pie chart illustrates the comparison of urban Chinese spending habits in 1995 and 2011, it is divided into the 8 categories which are the basic needs of the average people. Chart signifies the popularity of food in 2011 in spite of the decrease from 1995 but still remains the utmost category with 36% in 2011 and 50% in 1995, whereas spending on Transportation has increased significantly from 5% in 1995 to 14% in 2011. Slight increasee in Residential and Recreation spending, on the other hand we observed their decline in clothing from 14% in 1995 to 11% in 2011. Health seems to be little concering as consumption of medicines has increased in Chinese communities, 7% of spending in 2011 for medicines whereas 1995 it was just 3%. No change observed in Household facilities and there is a of 1% jump in Other category, 3% in 1995 to 4% in 2011. Overall, urban Chinese majorly spend on food which remains the biggest portion of their spendings.
Pie chart illustrates the comparison of urban Chinese
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spending
habits in 1995 and 2011, it
is divided
into the 8 categories which are the basic needs of the average
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people
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Chart signifies the popularity of food in 2011
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in spite of
the decrease from 1995
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remains the utmost category with 36% in 2011 and 50% in 1995, whereas
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spending
on Transportation has increased
significantly
from 5% in 1995 to 14% in 2011. Slight
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increasee
in Residential and Recreation
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spending
,
on the other hand
we observed their decline in clothing from 14% in 1995 to 11% in 2011.

Health seems to be
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little
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concering
as consumption of medicines has increased in Chinese communities, 7% of
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spending
in 2011 for medicines whereas 1995 it was
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just
3%. No
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change
observed in Household facilities and there is
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of 1% jump in Other category, 3% in 1995 to 4% in 2011.

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, urban Chinese
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spend on food which remains the biggest portion of their
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IELTS academic The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”.

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165 words
6.0
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